When looking at my classmates blogs I realized there were a lot of things that they had in common. There were a lot of things that we felt the same way about and then there were others things that we felt differently about for certain reasons, each of those being different.
When looking at Alyse L.’s blog I seen that she talked about how both authors described the problems that they have seen with “wordiness” occurring. She was saying that she sometimes has this problem in her writing and it can confuse the reader. I have always had this problem too and I still have it. In some cases I find myself getting better and I am able to catch it and correct it but there are others times that I’m not as lucky. I have also found that it confuses others and they are sometimes not able to understand what it is that I am trying to say.
I also found that we had the same views on the two different styles that both Williams and Strunk and White had. We both felt as though Williams did a better job of explaining things to us by giving examples and making sure that what he was saying was going to be understood by the reader. That is always helpful because it doesn’t leave you wondering what it was that you just read.
I read Maxine W.’s blog on comparing Williams to Strunk and White next an there was something in particular that stuck out to me. I liked how she pointed out that she likes to get her ideas on paper and then go back to follow the “rules of the game” which is basically just saying that she writes and then goes back to revise and edit. The reason that this stuck out to me is because this is something that I don’t do and maybe if I did it would help me out a lot. I spend so much time trying to perfect things while I’m writing that I over load myself and I get tired. When I get tired it becomes all downhill from there. I think that if I gave myself a break and some time to separate the two that my papers would be much better since I wouldn’t be straining my brain.
She also referred back to her previous blog about Strunk and White and talked about the “injecting opinion” and “overwriting” again. She was something that I also touched on in my Strunk and White blog because this is something that I often do as well. I like to inject my opinion when it’s not needed mainly because I may feel strongly about what is being discussed. At times I just can’t help it and I have to catch myself. I also have a habit of rambling and adding things that may not be needed because I may think that they’re important.
These two young ladies had a lot of the same ideas that I did and it was good to see that I wasn’t alone with some of my opinions and ideas. It was also interesting to see what other things they had to say that I may not have picked up on which was very helpful.
Strunk and White and Williams both taught me a lot and I can honestly say that after reading them I have walked away with knowledge about things I knew nothing about before. It’s a good feeling when you feel as though you aren’t that great of a writer but you constantly learn new things to improve your writing. With journalism being one of my majors I need to learn everything that I can.
I thought that one of the most important parts of Strunk and White was when they talked about “placing the empathetic words of a sentence at the end. This stuck out to me because I have always found myself placing the most important part at the beginning and then elaborating on it further towards the end. I just have always felt as though it was good to let the reader know what it is that they are going to read about and why it is important in the beginning. After reading that I try to change that now and I’m glad that I have these resources that help me to improve my writing because I would still be making that same simple mistake. Once you learn about something that you were doing wrong it is sometimes frustrating because a lot of the time it can be the simplest thing. It just makes you wonder why you never thought about it before.
Williams went on to talk about it in a different way. He just said that you should put the point at the end of a sentence instead of it always being at the beginning. The way that he put it was that you should set the reader up with information and then build on it up until the main point. The only difference that I found was that Williams book described things in more detail which was more helpful to me because it was easier to grasp what it was that he was trying to say. I thought that it was kind of helpful for Strunk and White to show the examples that he did but with him not really going into detail like I needed him to it left me hanging sometimes.
One thing that I can say about Strunk and White though was that bold words were used when something of importance was brought about. It let me know what exactly I needed to pay attention to and what was important for the reader to know. This was different from Williams because since he went into so much detail which I loved, it would’ve been difficult to go back and find something if I needed to.
The main things that stuck out to me were “not overwriting” and “not to inject opinion”. I find myself overwriting a lot and some say that I may even ramble. I repeat things over again especially when I get stuck and not know what else to write. This is a bad habit that I have when writing because I feel as though maybe I haven’t done enough researching or I haven’t worked hard enough. That can be frustrating when you kno you be done everything you’re supposed to do. When it comes to injecting opinion I do that a lot too. When writing some things I feel the need to state my own opinion. Especially depending on what it is that I have to write about, some things just are just hard to avoid stating how you feel.
I would have to say that I actually found this one more interesting than the first. I found myself being more engaged and having more to say this time around. The first time I wasn’t too sure about how to go about things and I was kind of confused seeing that I’ve never been to good at peer reviewing. I guess that the first peer review taught me some things and I was able to take some of the critiques that I was given as well as the ones that my peers were given and apply them to this peer review. I know that I still have some learning to do and I’m sure that there were some things that I looked over or could have done better but just knowing that I did better than the first time I am very pleased with myself.
This first one that I chose is a commercial for Christian Dior’s “J’adore ” perfume with Charlize Theron. The reason that I chose this is because of the look and feel of it. I was reminded of an older time by the lighting used and the design of the doors as she walked. I also thought that the play on words was interesting. When they say, “gold is cold” I am reminded of gold mines and how gold is underground and it’s cold underground. Then they say, “diamond’s are dead” and for some reason I thought of the same thing. Diamond’s are found underground as well and it just reminded me of the “blood diamond”.
The second one that I chose is a Nike ad and in this commercial their goal is to steal a certain ball that’s supposed to be “rounder”. I loved the way that they used the different lighting and the way that the ball was taken made me feel like they were stealing a prized possession from an ancient museum. The robots that were set up to stop them from taking it gave me the feel of mummies for some odd reason. I felt like they were in Egypt. Lol.
I LOVED the chapter on style. I feel like I learned so much that I never knew before and for me I’m not the best writer so it’s always good to find out new things. The definitions and explanations were very interesting which amazed me because there is NO way that I would go through and dictionary and enjoy reading words and definitions. They were put in a way that you wouldn’t get bored with them and just learning something new makes things much better. There were times that I found myself a tad confused and when that happens I have to read over things more than once but it’s nothing that I can’t overcome. Overall it was an interesting read and I enjoyed it.
The first peer review assignment was interesting to say the least. I guess that at first I didn’t understand the full concept so I had to go back and review the first paper that I edited. It was helpful because there were things that people suggested that I edit that I had not even thought about and mistakes that I had not even noticed. I sometimes find it hard for me to edit because I’m still learning things for myself and even though journalism is my major I feel like this is a weak spot for me. I’m not too good with punctuation and knowing where to place things and what to place in certain areas. It can be pretty irritating and I feel like it’s harming me seeing that I may not effectively and thoroughly be able to edit something for someone. I know that I’ll get better but it’s holding me back. This was helpful for all of us though.